I had a lot of fun in the first semester, doing all sorts of poems and essays just made me love English even more. But I wasn’t very good at certain kinds of writing. So one thing I would love to revise would be my writing territories. This essay was about one of my writing territories from my notebook that we wrote in the first week of school. The essay that I wrote about was my birthday. One reason why I want to revise it is because of how detailed I was. Detail is very good for a essay, but I put to much details from my personal life in this essay. Below is what I am trying to explain.
Once on September 6 1996 a little girl was born and they named her Kendra Jo Hanks. And now in present day she just turned 13 and that is what I am going to talk about my 13th birthday. First I got out of bed my feet tingling and feeling like there bursting in flames, because it was my grandparents 50th anniversary the night before and my feet really hurt from dancing all night. So as a walk out I see a delicious juicy breakfast pizza waiting to be eaten.
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